SAT ESSAY ONE SAT 满分作文
Score Explanation
This well organized and clearly focused essay demonstrates clear and
consistent mastery. By focusing on a personal example of change, the essay
effectively and insightfully develops the point of view that “what motivates
people to ch...
Score Explanation
This well organized and clearly focused essay demonstrates clear and
consistent mastery. By focusing on a personal example of change, the essay
effectively and insightfully develops the point of view that “what motivates
people to change is the desire to improve.” The writer demonstrates
outstanding critical thinking by describing “The evolution of my academic
habits and study skills.” The writer begins by discussing the lack of
motivation for school work and the emulation of an older brother, Tom, who
“had never worked hard, and he was perfect in my eyes.” Through observing
his brother fail and being reprimanded by his own teachers, the writer “came
to understand that, by emulating Tom’s study habits and being content with
mediocrity, I was following the same path he had taken.” With this
realization, the writer gained the desire to change and improve. The essay
concludes with a description of the ways the writer has improved since being
motivated to change. This complete response demonstrates clear coherence
and progression of ideas. The writer consistently exhibits a skillful use of
language and demonstrates meaningful variety in sentence structure (“My
parents, with Tom’s misfortunes fresh on their minds, gave me a lecture, or
two, or ten, about my need to change. I came to understand that, by
emulating Tom’s study habits and being content with mediocrity, I was
following the same path he had taken. I wanted to change that path, to do
better than he had, to improve”). This outstanding essay is scored 6.
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