读后续写LoveWillMeltYourHeart

LoveWillMeltYourHeart读后续写：ThedaybeforemydaughterNorah’sfourthbirthday，somethingshesaidsuggestedanunusualevent.I’djustpickedherupfrompre-schoolwhensheremindedmetomindtheelderlypersonwalkingacrosstheparkinglotatasnail’space.Shewentontoexplainthatshehadasoftspotforoldfolks,“IlikeoldpeoplethebestbecausetheywalkslowlylikeIwalkslowlyandtheyhavesoftskinlikeIhavesoftskin.Theyallgonnadiesoon,soIgonnalovethemallupbeforetheydie.”Iwasstruckbyherthoughtfulness(深思熟虑，体贴)andsympathy.Ihadnoideahowmuchshereallymeantit.Herfollowingday---herbirthday---againonthewayfromschool,sheaskedifwecouldstopatthegrocerystoretobuycupcakesforherandherbrothersandsisterstoenjoyafterdinner.Howdoyousaynotoabirthdaygirl？IputNorahandheryoungersisterintooneofthosecar-shapedgrocerycartandheadedtowardthebakery.Afterwepickedupthecupcakes,Istoppedataclearanceshelfthatcaughtmyeye.WhileIwasdistracted,Norahwasbusyingstandingupinthecart,excitedlywavingandshouting“Hi,oldperson.Itismybirthdaytoday.”Themanwaselderly,withhiswrinkledface.However,beforeIcouldblameherforcallinghimanoldpersonorasktheearthtoswallowmewhole,hestoppedandturnedtoher.Ifhewastroubledbymyinnocentchild,hedidn’tshowit.Hisexpressionsoftenedashereplied“Well,hello,Littlelady,howoldareyoutoday?”Theychattedforafewminutes,hewishedherahappybirthday,andwewentourseparateways.Afewminuteslater,sheturnedtomeandasked“canItakeapicturewiththeoldmanformybirthday？”ItwasthecutestthingeverandalthoughIwasn’tsureifhe’dbewillingto,Itoldherwe’dcertainlyask.注意：1.所续短文的词数为150词左右2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已经为你写好4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所用的关键词语paragraph1Afterafewminutes,IthankedMR.Danforspendingabitofhisdaywithus.____________________________________________________Para.2Afewdayslater,wevisitedMr.Dan’stidyhouse____________________________________________________ InterpretationoftheText文本解读AstoryhowwherewhenwhywhowhatInterpretationoftheText文本解读(Who)Norah“I”DanDaughterStrangersReadingfortherelationshipofthecharactersInterpretationoftheText文本解读(When)ThedaybeforemydaughterNorah’sfourthbirthdayAsIwasdistractedby…Thefollowingday—herbirthdayBeforeIcouldhushher…Then…InterpretationoftheText文本解读(How)Foucusontheverbsandtheexpressionsoftime.Readingfortheplotdevelopments.ThedaybeforeNorah’sfourthbirthday●●●●●●●●★TimeVerbsstandingupinthecartwavingandproclaimingwentontoexplain…chattedcautionedmetomindtheelderlyperson…placedhersofthandonansweredturnedtomeandaskedkepthishandinherskissedthetopofhishandplaceditonhercheekThefollowingday—herbirthdayAsIwasdistractedbyBeforeIcouldhushher…Then…●asked●●●Tip:Paymoreattentiontotheuseofv.adj.&adv.ReadingtheunderlinedwordsforcreationTip:将10个下划线词当成下棋的棋子，将它们摆一摆，看看他们在续写故事中的几种情节发展的可能性。10underlinedwords:Norah，best，love，girl，excitedly，turnedto，photo，soft，Dan，magicCharactersActionsObjectsFeelingsNorah,girl,Danloved,turntophotobest,excitedly,soft,magicInterpretationofunderlinedwords划线词解读Readingthefirstsentencesofthetwocontinuedparagraphsforcreation.Para.1Afterafewminutes,IthankedMr.Danforspendingabitofhisdaywithus.Para.2Afewdayslater,wevisitedMr.Dan’stidyhouseTip:Usereversethinking(逆向思维)skill.Interpretationofgiveninformation续写首句解读Interpretationofgiveninformation续写首句解读Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.1Afterafewminutes,IthankedMr.Danforspendingabitofhisdaywithus.NewInformationWhat’sMr.Dan’sresponsetomygratitude?Whatdidhesay?③WhatdidIdoafterwards?④WhatdidMr.Dansayordoafterwards?⑤HowdidIknowMr.Dan’saddress?Interpretationofgiveninformation续写首句解读Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para2.Afewdayslater,wevisitedMr.Dan’stidyhouse.①WhatdidIseeinMr.Dan’shouse?②WhatdidNorahdothere?③HowdidDansayandfeelthen?④HowdidIfeelaboutthevisit?NewInformationTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表达微技能之动作神态：人物喜乐篇Para.3:Hisexpressionsoftenedashereplied,“Well,hello,littlelady!Happybirthday!”.在续写文本中，我们可以通过情绪情感、心理活动、具体动作、对话独白、场景描写以及修辞更多种方式使得文章血肉丰满，厚实感人。词的积累：名词：excitement,joy,pleasure动词：cheer,yell形容词：happy,glad,pleased,cheerful,delighted,overjoyed,merry,副词：jollily,enjoyably,cheerfully,joyfullyTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表达微技能之动作神态：人物喜乐篇在续写文本中，记叙文的续写经常存在着字数不足，信息量不够，表达干瘪的缺点，无法准确传达故事类文章的情感因素。可以通过对于人物动作神态的扩充来丰富文章。II.词块和句的积累：1.Thesmileonherfaceshonelikeadiamond.2.Asmileofunderstandingflashedacrosshisface.3.Laughterlingeredaroundtheroom.4.Myfacewasshiningwithindescribablywildjoy.5Awildjoytookholdofher.6.Iwaswildwithjoy/delight.7Iwaspleasedbeyonddescription.8.Sheworeashiningsmileonherface.9.Hersmilelitupthewholeroom.10.Sheshedtearsofjoy./Tearsofhappinessflowingdownherface.11.Hereyesweresparklinglikediamonds.12.Hereyesshone/twinkled/dancedwithpleasure/delight/joy/sweetness.13.Herfacewasshiningwithexcitement.14.Iwasfloatingonair/overthemoon.PossibleversionAfterafewminutes,IthankedMr.Danforspendingabitofhisdaywithus.Hetearedupandsaid（神态及动作描写）,“No,thankyou.ThishasbeenthebestdayI’vehadinalongtime.”Afteramoment’ssilence,hemuttered,seemedtospeaktohimself,“ActuallyIhadn’tfeltsorelaxedandpleasing（神态及动作描写）sincemywifeMaryhadpassedawaysixmonthsearlier.”Thesmileonhisfaceshonelikeadiamond（神态及动作描写）.IwascertainDan’sheartwastouchedbymylittlegirl,thatheneededthatconnectionandlikelywouldneverforgetit.SoIaskedforhisphonenumberandaddressandarrangedtotakeNorahtoseehimsometime.Heturnedtomydaughterthen,“You’vemademesohappy,MissNorah.”Theyhuggedandwewalkedaway.Norahwatchedhimuntilhewasoutofview.I’dbelyingtoyouifIsaidIwasn’taweepymessaftertheirencounter.Afewdayslater,wevisitedMr.Dan’stidyhouse.RemindersofMarystillproudlydisplayedeverywhere.Hehadgottenahaircut,shaved,andputonslacksanddressshoes.Helookedtenyearsyounger.He’dsetoutachild’stable,blankpaper,andcrayonsformylittlegirl.Heaskedifshe’ddrawsomepicturesforhimtodisplayonhisrefrigerator.Norahexcitedlyagreedandwentrighttowork.WeendedupspendingnearlythreehourswithMr.Danthatday.NorahasksaboutMr.Daneveryday.ShewantshimtobeOKandfeelloved.Mr.DanthinksaboutNorahtoo.Afteranotherrecentvisit,hetoldmethathehadsleptsoundlyeverynightsincemeetingmygirl.“Norahhashealedme,”hesaid.Thatleftmespeechlessandmycheekswetwithtears.Seventy-eightyearsseparatethesetwopeopleinage.Somehow,theirheartsandsoulsseemtorecognizeeachotherfromlongago.评点：第一段中老人说的简短的一句话，“自从妻子去世后好久都没这么放松和开心过了”并且脸上的微笑如钻石般闪耀，此处的人物喜乐情绪描写把老人Dan开心激动又深受感动的心情刻画地非常到位，对于故事后续的发展起到了推波助澜的作用。第二段中，excitedlyagreed恰当地表现出了小女孩Norah作为一个四岁小孩子非常天真又单纯的开心情绪，对于刻画人物的形象起到了点睛之笔的作用。