高中英语读后续写指导：5R解读、4句框架和3大原则（五四三法）

联考读后续写指导：5R解读、4句框架和3大原则（五四三法）在教学中，读后续写初步摸索出：5R解读 故事 滥竽充数故事班主任管理故事5分钟二年级语文看图讲故事传统美德小故事50字120个国学经典故事ppt ；4句框架和3大原则（即：五四三法）目前看，这种方法还是比较有效的，当然有个前提，需要积累若干细节描写的语句才能发挥更大的效果。后面应该会不断完善。 题目：读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两端，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Mikelickedthelastofthemintchocolatechip icecream.Itwasalmosttimetoleave.Hejumpedintothecarwithhis parents andheadedofftotheOlympic-sized pool forthebigswimmeet.Whenhis race cameup,Mikewasconfident.Hewasstrongandswift.Mikeclimbedoutthepool,smiling.Hehadjust won firstplace,makinghimthefastestboyinhisagegroup."Congratulations,son,"hisfathersaid.Hismomgavehimahug,eventhoughhewassoakingwet.Aweeklater,itwastimeforanotherswimmeet.Likebefore,Mikedecidedtoenjoyhisfavoriteicecreamflavor.Mikerememberedthatthelasttimehehadwonarace,healsoatemintchocolatechipicecreamfirst.Maybehe'dwinagain.He’staken firstplace againinhisrace.Mikewasfeelingprettygood.Asitturnedout,MikedecidedtohavesomemintchocolatechipIcecreambeforeeveryoneofthenextfewswimmeets.Hebegantothinkofitashis luckycharm.Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewasfeelingunbeatable.Andhewouldn’tadmitit,butallthaticecreamwasaddingafewpoundstohisathleticswimmer'sbuild.Itdidn’ttakelongafterthatforMiketostartcominginsecondplace-andthenthird-andthenlastplaceinhisraces.Theluckymintchocolatechipicecreamhadlostits magic.Onthedayofhisnextswimmeet,hismothersatdownatthetablewithhim.“Mike,weallloveicecream,butit'snot healthy foryourbodytoeatsomuchofit.Maybeit'stimetoquitthesweettreatsforawhile,especiallybeforeyougoswimming.Mikeunwillinglyagreed.Hewenttotheswimmeet,anddidn’t perform well.Hisfatherofferedtogorunningwithhimafewdaysaweektohelphimfeelbetterandstrengthenhismuscles.Theextraweightsoondisappeared,andMikefoundhimselfbreathingeasieratswimpractices.It was the last meet of the season, and Mike wasn’t sure what to expect.He felt healthyagain,but he didn’t know if he still had any speed in the pool.注意:1.       所续写短文的字数应为150左右；2.       至少使用五个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.       续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.       续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Paragraph  1:As he drove into the water,he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could.Paragraph 2:His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time,and everyone else too. 如何快速写：第一步：Analyzethestory：5Rs1.Readforcharacters:Mike,hisparents,Icecream,teammates2.Readforconflict/problems：IcecreamandMike’sperformance:WhetherisitaLuckycharm3.Readforplot:4.Readforemotionalchanges:Whenhisracecameup,Mikewas confidentMikewas feelingprettygood.Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewas feelingunbeatable.Mike unwillingly agreed.5.ReadforthemeWhatcontributestoMike’ssuccessinswimming?第二步：四句定框架：写读后续写不同于写其它作文，有可能需要先倒着写的Step1: 先把最后一句写好，即：主题句Mikerealizedthatone’sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence.Step2: 再把衔接句写好，即第一段的最后一句：Hedashedtothefinishline.Step3: 紧接着每段的提示语句写角色的情感：Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse’stoo.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom.接下来就是把每段的中间补充完整，记住三大原则：1.Action—Response原则：角色A的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其它角色的一系列反应的。每段对话1-2句，不一定两个人都要说话，无声的动作也是一种response。2.Conflict—Solution原则：一般而言第二段会有问题的solution，但本文和高考的读后续写文章出题不一样，因为solution在所给文章中就已经有了。同时思考：能否在第一段出现一个问题，然后把它解决了或者没有解决。一方面是增加看点，另一方面也是给第二段铺垫。3.Negative—Positive原则：写作中一定要体现情感的变化，无论前面是这样的变化，最终都是积极的。 最终： Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould. 1.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody. （心情）2.“ThisiswhereIbelong.Ican win the race,”thoughthe,histeethclenchedandhiseyesfixedonthefinishlineforward. （内心独白）3.Suddenly,twofigures whizzed past,whichstartledhim. （心情变化））4.Fearingtofallbehind,hefelthisheartpoundedfranticallyandhismindwentblank. （解释心情变化和问题）5.Justthen,hethoughtofhissweatandhisfather’sencouragingsmile. （问题的解决方法）6.Gradually,hisworrygavewaytohisconfidenceandthelast5minutessawhimdashtothefinishline,followedbytheendoftherace. （衔接句） Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse’stoo.7.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom. （心情变化）8.However,heknewhedeservedthehonorofchampionship. （拓展）9. Hisparents cameupandgavehimahighfive,grinningfromeartoear. （次要角色的回应）10.“Hey,whynottryyourfavoriteicecreamandcelebrate!”saidhisfather,pattinghisontheshoulder. （对话1）11.“Thanks,Dad,butIhavegivenupthe icecream.It’snotsucha luckycharm atall.”Hiseyesshonewithwisdom.（对话2）12.ItwasthatdaythatMikerealizedthatone’sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence.（照应开头的主旨句）