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首页 2006高考作文评析 范文【广东卷】(Comment on composition of 200…

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高考作文评析范文【广东卷】(CommentoncompositionofcollegeentranceexaminationmodelessayGuangdongvolume)高考作文评析范文【广东卷】(CommentoncompositionofcollegeentranceexaminationmodelessayGuangdongvolume)originaltitleplaybackReadthefollowingtextandwriteaccordingtotherequirementsAsculptorwascuttingapieceofunfinishedmarblewithaknife,andalittleboylookedcuriouslyathimThestatuegraduallyforms,head,shoulders,arms,body,andthenhair,eyes,nose,mouthAlovelylittlegirlappearedinfrontofherThelittleboyaskedthesculptorinsurprise:"howdoyouknowshe'shidinginit""Alaugh,hetoldthechild:"thestonewasoriginallywhatalsohaveno,Ijustputmyangelinmyheartwithaknifetomovehere"Pleasewriteanarticlewithnolessthanwordsonthetopicof"angelsintheheart"Thetitleisselftitled,exceptthepoemThecontentmustbewithinthetopicTopicinterpretationDifferentfromthelastyear'scollegeentranceexaminationessaycompositioninGuangdongprovince(lastyeariscomposedofthreeparts:promptlanguage,topicandcompositionrequirement),thisyear'sarticleconsistsofthreeparts:quotedmaterial,topicandcompositionrequirementsThesetwotopicshavedifferentpropositionsApromptbenefitistohelpstudentsunderstandandgraspaccuratelythetopic,disadvantageistoolimited,isnotconducivetoplaywithoutpromptcandidatesbenefitislessrestrictive,forcandidatestoplaytheirownspace,increasethestudentsunderstandingofthetopicisdifficult,alsoincreasedthedifficultyofcorrectingpapersOfcourse,"quotematerial"alsohasahinttothetopic,whichisthedifferencebetweentopiccompositionandmaterialcompositionMaterialcompositioncanonlyrefinetheviewpointfromthewholeofthematerial,andthenwriteandthetopiccompositioncanunderstandthetopicaccordingtothematerial,orcanunderstandthetopiconlyonthetopicIntermsoftheexpressionofthetopic,itshouldbegrammaticalerrors,saying"carveouttheangelsintheheart"ismorelogicalNext,weunderstandthetopicconnotationfromtwoaspectsbygraspingthekeywordsUnderstandingof"carving"Accordingtothematerialunderstanding"carve",therearefouraspectsofmeaning,"carving"isthemeans,methodsandactionsThesculptorinthematerialtransformsthisideaintotangible,visible,visiblestatuesbycarvingitAccordingly,wecanrefinesuchaphilosophy:toconverttheangelintheheartintotheactualangel,needthemethod,andmoreneedistheactualaction,"carving"hasashapingprocessInthematerial,thesculptoris"knifeandknifecarving",andthesculptureis"graduallyformed"Accordingly,wecanrefinethephilosophy:carvingangelsintheheartneedsaprocess,andneedstobecarvedoutisthepartofthemarblecarvedAngelremoved,sotherearecarvedQucuqujing,toconstantlyimprovethesignificanceofgoodandevilthesculptorhadanangelfirst,andthenhemovedtheangelinhishearttothestoneSo,"carving"alsohastheintentionofdoingsomethingattentively,carefully,patientlyandpainstakinglyLeavingmaterialunderstanding"carving"canbeextendedto:realization,establishment,growth,practice,andsoonTheunderstandingof"heart"Accordingtothematerial,shouldbethesculptor'sheartonthebasisofmaterial,canbecandidatesoftheheart,heart,someoneinthepaperorinanarticle,"heart"mustchangeconstantly,havetodoTheunderstandingofangelMakecleartheoriginalmeaningfirstModernChineseDictionary:Judaism,Christianity,IslamandotherreligionsrefertothemessengerofgodInwesternliteratureandart,angelsaremostlygirlsorchildrenwithwings,andnowtheyareoftenusedtodescribetheinnocentandlovelypeople(womenorchildren)Emperor'senvoyAccordingtothematerialunderstanding"angel","angel"referstothelovelylittlegirl,extendedtolovely,beautifulpeople,things,thingsTheangelisnotthemessengerofthematerial,buttheangelisthemessengerofspreadingthegospelItistheincarnationofthetrue,thegoodandthebeautifulTheangelinthetopicisnotakindofspecific,shouldbeunderstoodasabroadangel,referstothebeautifulpeople,things,things,goals,etcThetopicisafigurativetopiccompositionwithverbobjectstructureWeshouldunderstand"figurativecarvingofanangel,"angelanalogybettergoals,ideals,carvingisgooddesign,good,thetopicisthemeaningofgooddesign(set)theirgoals(ideal)Towritethistopic,firstofall,weshouldfindtheimpliedmeaningof"sculpture"and"angel"Itcanbeunderstoodas"action","perfection","requirement","gradualrealization",and"angel"as"success,perfection,ideal,belief"andsoonTherefore,thecompositionofthistopiccanbeunderstoodas:graduallyrealizeidealswithactions,idealsandbeliefs,thepursuitofperfection,etcThenarrativeandargumentativeessayswritteningoodwriting,maybemoreliketopicsliketherichpoetic"Thetopiccanbeunderstoodas"intheheartofthedesignoftheirowngoal,canalsobeunderstoodas"shapingthesouloftheUnitedStatesitself,thefirstcanbewrittenashowtoachievetheheartgoodgoals,suchasdowntoearth,startsmall,graduallyachievethegoal,canbewrittenintospecificthings,canalsobewrittenargumentative"Howdoyouknowanangelishiddeninastone""Itcanbeunderstoodthattheeyesshouldbebeautifulinlife"Intheheartofthedesignoftheirowngoal,canalsobeunderstoodas"shapingthesouloftheUnitedStatesitselfthefirstcanbewrittenashowtoachievetheheartgoodgoals,suchasdowntoearth,startsmall,graduallyachievethegoal,canbewritteninaspecificthing,canalsobewrittenargumentative"Howdoyouknowanangelishiddeninastone""ItcanbeunderstoodthattheeyesshouldbebeautifulinlifeFullScoreessayA,I'manangelWhenIwasyoung,IalwayslikedtowatchmymotherwearawhitedressShewassobeautiful,sohappy(I)bymymotherholdingasmallhand,goodhappiness,goodhappiness!Atthattime,mymotherwasanangelinmyheartButmymotherlovedtocallmeaffectionately:"AnQi,you'reanangel"!"Iamnotanangel,orwastakenintoheavenhowismother,notme"Ihopemyangelwillbeasgoodasanangel"!"Mother'sdiarywroteIfeelmytears,mymotherwantsmetobeanangel,likeanangel,thenI'mgoingtobeanangel,evenifI'mnot,butI'llworkhardButwhatisanangellikeJustlikemom!SoIhadlonghair,anditwasbeautifullycombedWearalongwhiteskirt,walklightlyThewordsaresweetandthemovementsaregentleLookingatmyselfinthemirror,IwasverysimilartomymotherButmyheartsaystome,"youjustlooklikeanangel,justlookbeautiful,butyou'renot"!"WhatisanangelIaskedmyselfinmyheart,butIdidn'tanswerMaybeit'sarealgoodthingIthought,soIwentlookingfortherealgoodIbegantolearntosmilelikeamother,verywarmandcomfortableIlearnthatsmiletoeveryone,whetheritispoor,sick(orwrite)Maybetheworldneedsthissmile,maybeitisme,myheartbecomestransparentandlightdaybydayTheworldisbeautiful,thesmileisbeautiful,butI'mnotanangelMyheartandIoftentalk,howcanwebecometheangelintheheart,thesouldoesnothaveaclearanswer,butIamtrying!Untiloneday,Itookmymother'svolunteerservicecardto"children'shome",andIseemtofeelI'mgoingtoinsertmywingshereOrphansandmentallyretardedchildrenherearemiserable,butI'mhappytodothingsforthemAlthoughtheyjustcleantheroom,teachthemtoread,write,drawandplaygameswiththemLookingattheirsimplesmile,Ithinkthey'reangels,andsoami!"Angelsister,youplaywithme"!"Bendone'sheadAnangel'slittlesistersmiledatme,"you'rekind"!"Thisisthebestcompliment"Wow!"Mywingsareopen!Originally,kindnessandsincerityaretwowingsofanangelIrememberedmymotherShealwayswantedmetobekind,sincere,asgoodasanangel!Isee,andIdidIamanangel,verybeautifulteachercommentthisisafullvolumeofproseTheexamineeunderstandstheword"angel"accuratelyandinplace,takeskindnessandbeautyasthecenter,takesactionandthinkingasthesporadicpoint,andwritesthestorywithtwistsandturns,vividandmovingThearticlewritestheimitationmother'sattire,imitatesmother'ssmile,thenobtainsthevolunteerservicecard,implementstheserviceworker'swork,hascompleted"angel"rolegradualtransformationFromanotherperspective,thearticledescribestheimageof"angel"plump,motherisanangel,"Iwanttobeanangel,andfoundthattheorphanisanangel,iscreative,innovativeideas,freshmaterials,ingenioushighlightsdialysisBasicgrade:meetthestylisticrequirementsProsewriting,theauthortakesthekindnessandbeautyasthecenter,withsporadicthinkingaction,willwritethestorytwistsandturns,vividandmoving,genuineandsinceresincerefeelingsTheauthorwriteshisownimitationofmother'sdress,imitateshismother'ssmile,andthengetsthevolunteerservicecard,fulfillstheworkoftheservant,completesthegradualtransformationof"angel"role,andmoveswithemotionDevelopmentlevel:fullimageThearticledescribes"angel"imageplump,motherisanangel,"I"wanttobeanangel,andfoundthatorphansarealsoangelsinnovative,innovativeideasInthearticle,theauthorfocusesonportrayingtheimageof"angel",usingthecomparativewritingmethodsuccessfully,theendofthearticle,ingenioussublimation,novelideas,ingeniousconceptionBcarvedangelintheheartHowmuchfortheDynastyfromancienttomoderntimes,thecrafty,LordHunkuiandcapsizedTheworldforthousandsofyears,howmanypeoplehavebeenconfusedhearts,slipgrudge,regretforlifeItishardtoachievethegoalofgoverningthecountrybymishandlingtheangelsintheheartSeoulbecametheemperorZhao'ssister,manychildrenintheaffair,indulgeinsensualentertainment,"angel"cried,thentowrath,twohundredyearsoftheHanDynasty,onceforWangMangandNewton,thegiantphysicalvibrationuniversal,butinlateryearsasthereligiousfeelingsofentanglement,make"absurdjudgmentbyGodthefistblowandcreatedtheearth","angel"isnolongerfavoredLiuBeibrotherscouldnotunderstand,hastilydispatchedtroopscometoacamp,burneighthundred,HanHenBaidichengthesadending,onlywiththerecoveryoftheHanRoyalfamilyatthebehestofTuoguprimeminister,arevivaloftheHanDynasty,alsocarved"angel"itdies,deepcanbepainful!Inthecountry,the"leader"shouldbegoodatcarving,persevere,"angel"willshowthetargetwouldbeachievedItisnoteasyforustoliveinthisworldEverystepofyourlifeisaserioustopicEverymanhasinertia,andifheisnotgoodatcarving,howisitnotagreatlossofman!Undertheinfluenceoftheword"heart",carvingwillmakeusneedtolistenattentivelytothemostrealvoice,tothinkaboutthemostspecificimage,anddepictthemostbrilliantbrillianceMaketherightjudgmentandchoiceThroughouthistory,thisistrueofsocietyaswellTheangelislonely,butitlookslikeadeserttree,youneedtocarefullywatered,needsunshineandwindtotouch,earthandSkyNews,besomeothertreewatchingandechoAngelsrelyonsoulperception,andbeyondthesensitivityofperceptionSelfcultivation,exerciseheart,istherealPolishrecipeKafka,ProustandLuXun,whoarevulnerabletothedisease,havegainedeternallifeinliteraturebecausetheyaregoodatcarvingangelsintheirheartsGoodatcarving,angelislikeabranchfullofvitalityofthelotus,intheshiningsun,seemsunusuallybright,bright,freshandvivid,veryprettyandcharmingswayinginthegreen,sma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gavehimtheinspirationofinvention,faithgavehimthepowerofinvention,andfinallyhebelievedinthegreatfutureofmybeliefintheabilitytoachievetheirvalueinlifeSufferingfromforeigninvasionofourcountryChina,underthestrongforeignandadvancedaircraftandartillery,thepeopleofourcountryadheretothebeliefofvictory,andfinallydefeatedtheinvaders,andestablishedtheGreatChinatodayWithoutafirmbelief,canthethreethousandVietnamesebeswallowedbyWuWithoutthebeliefofinvention,canEdisonhavetoday'sachievementWithoutthefirmwilltowin,canourcountryeasily(or)getridofforeignersIthinktheanswerisselfevident,andIthinktheanswerisunquestionableBecausenowadaysourcountryisintheprimarystageofsocialism,agreatmanystrategiesareneededforourmodernpeopletocompleteit,withastrongbeliefcannotgiveuphalfway,believethatwecanreachthegreatgoalofsocialismFirmbeliefisalwaysburiedinourhearts,wemustdefydifficulties,withafirmbelieftodeduceamovingsongTofirmfaithintosharpweapontostruggleagainst,lifewiththefirmfaithintothesurfIbelievethatwewillreachtheothersideofthevictorysomeday,becausewehaveafirmbeliefinourheartswarningalthoughthisismisunderstanding,ifnotdeviatefromit,completelyputasidethetopicwords,canalsobeamediumcompositionButbecausetheauthorcompletelyabandonsthetopic,doesnotconsider"carves"and"theangelintheheart"therelations,thuscausesthebigmistakeThismaybethecandidatesinthe"proforma"backoneortwo"model",then"slavishly"intheexaminationresultThelanguageissimple,isreadableandfluent,theerrorcausedbythepoint,finally,wasawardedpointsInordertosolvethemetaphoricaltopiccompositionpiantibesidethisproblem,mustgraspthemetaphoricaltopicawareofthe"threeprinciples","twopoints"Metaphoricaltopicthreeprinciplesofmoderation:,weshouldgraspthefeaturesofthemetaphor,andfindsimilaritieswhenlookingforthenoumenonTofindthebody,youcantrytochangeasimiletoverify,beawareofthewhole,don'tjustholdontoitfigurativetopicsshouldbegoodatfindingthebreakthroughpointfromthematerialsprovidedMaterialsareusedtohelpusunderstandmetaphorsWhentheontologyisuncertain,theexamplescitedareasmuchthesameasthosecontainedinthematerialMetaphoricaltopiccompositionsmoderatorstwopoints:Thetopicisonthemeaningofthesubject,scopeandrequirementsofthereviewDuetothespecialnatureofthecompositionofseniorhighschoolstudentshavethecharacteristicsoftheme,soIalsohasitsowncharacteristics,thekeytaskistheconceptionofmoderationThatistosay,whatshouldthearticlebewrittenaboutgraspthetheme,clearrequirementsThecompositionpropositionofcollegeentranceexaminationconsistsoftwoparts,oneisthetitleorthematerialitself,andthetwoisthespecificrequirementsPartoftherequirementsincludewords,style,focus,title,orthewaytheexpressionislimited,thesearethefactorsrestrictingwriting,mustfirstclearaccuratelyandfullyunderstandthequestionsThesocalledaccurateandcomprehensive,iscarefullyreading,everypartofthewritingtestontheshow,exactknowledgeoftheirmeaningThetopicisaccurateornotfullornot,willdeterminewhetherthecontentandformofthedecisioninaccordancewiththerequirements,designwillbeintherightdirection,itcanbesaidthatthefateofthebasicdecision

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