20116CET4作文评讲onlineshopping

20116CET4作文评讲onlineshopping 2011,6CET4 作文评讲 Online shopping 1. 现在网上购物已成为一种时尚 Nowadays, with the rapid development of information technology, online shopping has gained great popularity among an increasing number of users. For example, it is fashionable for youngsters to purchase daily essentials, such as books, clothes, electrical equipment, on some famous website, like Taobao, EBay and Alibaba. It goes without saying that online shopping is beneficial to customers and retailers alike in more than one way. For consumers, it energy-saving to purchase whatever they want on the Internet is time- and at a much lower price. For retailers, they can save lots of costs that are originally used to rent a store in the downtown and pay employees for less salary compared with traditional market sale. However, despite the many benefits brought by online shopping, there are still some defects that cannot be ignored. For one thing, lack of face-to-face communication makes online shopping less reliable and trustworthy. For another, some merchants with evil motives may provide false information, which makes it time-consuming to identify the commodity. From my perspective, the benefits of online shopping outweigh its defects, and to refuse to eat for fear of choking is always an unwise choice. One of the effective measures is to carry out relevant laws to regulate the online trading activities.? Only when a harmonious Internet environment is established can we enjoy the pleasure and convenience of online shopping. 辩证观 点:趋利避害 As far as I am concerned, its advantages outweigh its disadvantages. We should try to bring the advantages of __讨论议题____ into full play, and reduce the disadvantages to the minimum at the same time. 号召呼吁:解决办法 Therefore, a dozen of measures are supposed to be taken to prevent X from bringing us more harm. First,… Second… 预 测展望 Only in that case/way will we definitely make a better use of the ____讨论议题___. 亮点回顾 在越来越多的…受到欢迎 Become popular among more and more … Gain great popular among an increasing number of … 购 Purchase daily essentials/necessities 不用说 It goes 买生活必需品 without saying 节省时间、精力 Time-saving, energy-saving 耗费时间 Outweigh 因噎废食 to refuse to eat for fear Time-consuming 利大于弊 of choking is always an unwise choice. 规范 regulate 从我的观点来说， From my perspective, To my mind, As far as I am concerned, 作文讲评 1. 现在网上购物已成为一种时尚 2. 网上购物有很多好处，但也有不少问题 3. 我的建议 审题+写作重点+篇幅 P1 P3 P1 With the fast development of the modern life, out entertainment has become much more colorful. Of course, the life on line is becoming so fashionable. We read books, play games, go shopping as well. It’s so easy to do those things online. A very sunny afternoon, you sit on the chair, drinking tea, and watch the clothes of fashion all over the world, and one thing is so fit to you, but it’s only sold in America, what a pity, but online it’s not a problem at all, you only need click the mouse, then after a few days, you can wear it to take part in yout friend's party. But a knife has two sides, … 结构 按提纲 分段 主题句+扩展句(分点写) 语言 Online shopping becomes attached to a lot of people. Online shopping attach an increasing number of people’ s attention People in increasing numbers are attaching greater importance to online shopping Greater importance should be attached to online shopping Online shopping has much benefits. There are a lot of advantages of online shopping. It is widely believed that online shopping provides us with many benefits as follows. There are also disadvantages of online shopping. Just As a popular saying goes, "every coin has two sides", __讨论议题______ is no exception, and in other word, it still has negative aspects which can not be ignored. P2 There are varieties of advantages as well as disadvantage Convinient Convenient Convenint Convinent Convenient Convenience inconvenient Could Would I wanna Bring-take -choose Sell-sale Saled-sold 检查 单词拼写 词性 success n Choice succeed v 主谓一致:电脑很有用 Computers are very useful 时态:作文基 本上以现在时为主。 情态动词+V. 情态动词的一般现在时 成绩 6，7，8 错误 太多 没有亮点 10 建议(5-8) 研究好词好句 多背好词好句 多用好词好句 写完务必检查 建议( 10) 研究好词好句 创造好词好句 写完务必检查 * * 1. 现在网