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null 作文讲评 作文讲评开放作文开放作文 请根据下面 提示 春节期间物业温馨提示小区春节期间温馨提示物业小区春节温馨提示春节物业温馨提示物业春节期间温馨提示 ，写一篇短文。词数不少于50。 In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.结构：1/3描述+2/3议论 时态：现在进行时、一般现在时null类型： 现象/寓意型 特点：有人有物 要素：大书、少年、 眼镜、试卷 审 图null审图： 话题：书籍是我们的朋友 要素：大书、少年、眼镜、试卷 寓意： 大书---知识的海洋/忙不完的学业--- knowledge; school work; workload; pressure 少年---我们学生---senior 3 students 眼镜---视力差---身体差… 试卷---功课辛苦---efforts；burden of exams；hardship of learning;null审图问题： 多角度挖掘积极意义 1）忽略细节“眼镜、卷子” 2）忽略少年睡觉的表情微笑、平静、满意 3）大书厚厚的，刚打开一页 抓细节 揭寓意抓细节 揭寓意1）少年睡着了，面带微笑---努力后释然满意 smile---satisfied;happy; sleep---get bored; be ignorant; be lazy; ignorance/laziness(消极或积极） 2）厚厚的大书刚打开---人生才刚刚开始---lifelong friends like the bed/stop rather than go ahead 3）试卷、眼镜就在少年的旁边，少年的手放在试卷上---虽很辛苦却放不下功课/对功课置之不理 null One possible version: What an interesting picture! A boy is sleeping on a large opened book with sheets of paper and a pair of glasses beside him. He must have done some reading before falling asleep. Besides, the sweet smile on his face shows that he is satisfied with what he has gained from the books. To my understanding, the picture intends to tell us the importance of doing some reading. We can increase our knowledge, broaden the mind, enrich our life and make ourselves relaxed by reading books. As a student, I think we should read as many good books as possible. Only in this way can we improve ourselves greatly.null1）从大书的角度 ★开卷有益： Knowledge is what makes unfulfilled. 正确的立意null ★书是心灵的港湾： I think what the picture conveys to us is that books are of great importance to people just as beds are. It is from the picture that we can observe that books are our life-long friends, friends who can help us when we are debilitated, relieve us when we are forced to bend to the heavy burden of life, direct us when we get puzzled and encourage us when we are halfway towards our dreams. It is books that provide us a peaceful world to rest ourselves both in body and inside the body.正确的立意null2）从少年的角度 ★读书的态度： 爱读书；学无止境要刻苦学习终生学习 From my perspective, the picture tries to convey that one should not be easily satisfied with what he has learnt or achieved. What the picture conveys to us is that a person ought to immerse himself in books or knowledge when he is eager to study something deeply. ★做书的朋友：朝夕相处；终生相伴 Only if we long for knowledge and keep reading can we become a full, ready and exact man. 正确的立意null3）从二者结合的角度： ★高三生活现状： In my opinion, the image accurately reflects the worrying condition we students are now in. ★正确对待高三学习生活： 虽苦犹乐： As far as I am concerned, the picture wants to convey the message that when one bends his mind to do something worthy of his persistence, hardships surrounding him seem inconsequential(微不足道的，无关紧要的） to him. 正确的立意null 苦尽甘来： To try to get ahead in the severe competition, he indulges himself in the world of knowledge and reviews new lessons every night. His suffering will pay off when the final day comes. As far as I concern, it is clear that the boy is so tired but satisfied, for he must have been studying for a long time. The image conveys to us that one should study hard and constantly to make oneself full of gratification and endless happiness. ★正确处理休息与学习的关系：学会调节节奏： Try to balance the relationship between learning and relaxation.null ★教育的本质： Learning not only stands for getting knowledge from books, but also stands for learning from real life, from which we’ll get real knowledge, health as well as positive attitude towards everything. People who are buried with overload work live an unhealthy life. 正确的立意null不正确的立意：忽视知识，不求进取 满足现状，不劳无获 只睡不干活 效率低下 床是用来睡觉的，不应在床上学习 珍惜时间，不浪费光阴 可以考虑的立意： 不能死读书读死书，从书海中走出来 学习不能黑白颠倒，要处理好学习与效率的关系 懒惰不可能成功null可以接受的立意： What we should do is to read it instead of stopping on the first page and dreaming of the success. To my understanding, the picture aims to humorously criticize those people who know nothing but reading books. The sleeping young man is just an example of those who bury themselves in their piles of books, losing sight of all the beauty in their real life. null可以接受的立意： A man who is lazy will not be able to succeed in learning. The thought-provoking picture conveys the message that we should study by heart with an earnest attitude as well as actions…As is universally acknowledged, real actions is always superior to useless imaginations. null如何使用引语论证？ In my opinion, this picture does mean something profound and directive to us. The book’s prodigious size, to some degree, symbolizes the vast and boundless ocean of knowledge, to which the young boy is so addicted that that he even sleeps inside the book! Or you can say, he is completely immersed in the sea of knowledge. As Bacon says, “Reading makes a full man.” Only if we long for knowledge and keep reading can we become a full, ready and exact man. “Histories make men wise; poets witty; the mathematics subtle; moral grave.” No matter what we read, it is always useful. 写作技巧null经典释义法好文 From my personal perspective, I believe this picture conveys the idea that books are the best place for us to rest our minds. On the pages of our most cherished books lie the words that carry the feelings of another soul. Through reading, we travel to the most remote mountains, witness the most breathtaking scenery and explore the secrets of the stars above. Our minds go beyond the personal level and merge into ocean of human wisdom. There, we forget our own gains and losses and reach an unparalleled（无比的，空前未有的） state of peace, so we may rest our souls on the book as sweetly as the boy in the picture.写作技巧null如何建立描议联系： In the picture, a boy is sleeping on a big book which is full of knowledge and he seems to have a sweet dream. I think what the picture conveys to us is that books are of great importance to people just as beds are. No one can sleep nice without his bed, at the same time; no one can lead a happy life without books. Books not only provide us with knowledge that we need in life, but also help us lift our burden so that we could have a good sleep. In my opinion, books are our long-time friends. Whatever we read, read with passion and our whole mind. 写作技巧null According to the picture, we can clearly see that a boy is lying on a huge book for a rest with a pair of glasses as well as some pieces of paper laid beside him, yet a broad smile with relief is obvious to be seen. From my point of view, knowledge is the power as it brings the courage to us to keep on going as well as the satisfaction that makes us feel good. We teenagers are just like the boy while the huge book represents the hardship of studying we are meant to be faced. Rather than escaping from it, what we should come to realize is that study never fails to be a tough thing and it is the dedication that makes us feel satisfied and pleased. Above all, we are born to be filled with knowledge. So what I suggest is we face it with the sense of conquest and confidence so as to dream of the shinning future in our deepest dreams. 写作技巧描图-议图-升华null二档范文一 As is shown in the picture, a boy is sleeping soundly on top of a huge and thick book, with a pillow under his head. Several pieces of paper, probably his uncompleted homework and a pair of eyeglasses lie beside him. As far as I am concerned, the picture wants to convey the message that when one bends his mind to do something worthy of his persistence, hardships surrounding him seem inconsequential to him. The boy is just like us in the final year of high school, burying ourselves in learning new knowledge and reviewing them every day. It’s common for us to sit up late to do the revision as well as endless exercises that we may fall asleep unconsciously in the late evening since we are so knocked out. But, as long as we enjoy the process and don’t regard the tasks assigned by teachers as a burden on us, we won’t find it too arduous to get through the year and will keep a positive mood every day, just like the boy smiles even when he is sleeping on the book, symbolizing the school works waiting for him. Therefore, let’s keep a smile when faced with masses of homework and cherish the last year in high school and make full use of it so as to make our ideals come true.null二档范文2: In the picture is a teenage boy lying on the page of an enormous opened book, fast asleep, with papers scattered around him and a pair of glasses next to his pillow. In my opinion, the image accurately reflects the worrying condition we students are now in. The College Entrance Examination is like a giant boulder constantly pressuring us to work harder. The belief that only by being admitted into the top universities can one secure a bright future and lead a happy, successful life is deeply rooted in the minds of many people, and that sort of thinking is what keeps us hunched over desks and studying late into the night, working around the clock and damaging our eyesight along the way. We are practically ‘living inside books’ at the moment. However, since the current situation is unpleasant but no doubt inevitable, what we should do is not start moaning and complaining about the hardships, but to improve our study methods and devise ways to be more efficient. View the picture as a warning signal to our present attitude towards studying, and try to enjoy the process of equipping ourselves for the future. null可接受立意好句 It reflects a very common phenomenon that the tasks left for those students to finish are so many that they even study during sleeping time. We should work hard as well as have a break to refresh ourselves…to keep the balance between work and break. We should balance our time in study and relaxation. A man who is lazy will not be able to succeed in learning. As is evident to all, books are the access to wisdom. They can equip us with knowledge, broaden our horizons and enable us to learn from others.null可接受立意好句 What we should do is to read it instead of stopping on the first page and dreaming of the success. The thought-provoking picture conveys the message that we should study by heart with an earnest认真的 attitude as well as actions…As is universally acknowledged, real actions is always superior to useless imaginations. To my understanding, the picture aims to humorously criticize those people who know nothing but reading books. The sleeping young man is just an example of those who bury themselves in their piles of books, losing sight of all the beauty in their real life.null The picture suggests that people should be absorbed into what they work or study in order to achieve great success. The knowledge of mankind is like the big dictionary in the picture… 正确立意好句 The picture in fact reveals揭露 a simple truth that the book is the right place where people can lie down and give their heats a break…The book is like a harbor where you can always navigate驾驶 your ship of soul into when the storm comes. The thought-provoking picture conveys the message that we can always relax and refresh精神振作，恢复精神 ourselves by means of reading when we are stressed out. Books are gardens where the flowers of intelligent minds blossom and send out sweet fragrance. null 正确立意好句 The picture demonstrates the role that books play in our life…Reading can refresh our mind, relieving all the stress and pressure. The book is just like a comfortable bed, on which we can relax ourselves to the fullest. The picture tries to convey to us that we should know the relationship between study and rest…Lack of rest leads to low efficiency of learning, which will result in an even less time of sleeping. keep a balance between study and relaxation null 正确立意好句 The huge book represents the knowledge and the wisdom of human beings while the paper stands for what we have already learnt. The world is a huge book and an individual is nothing but a single page. The picture tells us that we can relax ourselves by reading books which could lead us to our dreams. null一档范文 The picture mainly depicts描绘 a boy sleeping soundly on a huge book. He looks peaceful and happy lying on the book. null一档范文 From my personal perspective观点，看法, I believe this picture conveys the idea that books are the best place for us to rest our minds. On the pages of our most cherished爱护，珍爱 books lie the words that carry the feelings of another soul. Through reading, we travel to the most remote mountains, witness the most breathtaking scenery and explore the secrets of the stars above. Our minds go beyond the personal level and merge 合并，结合into ocean of human wisdom. There, we forget our own gains and losses and reach an unparalleled state of peace, so we may rest our souls on the book as sweetly as the boy in the picture.