英英语六级范文及分析(1)

英英语六级范文及分析(1) A Brief Introduction to a Tourist Attraction Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of students selecting their lecturers. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below: 1. 欢迎词。 2. 一天的行程安排。 3. 对旅客即将访问的地点进行描述。 4. 你应该让这个介绍很吸引人，并且让每个人都清楚了解你的行程安排。 范文 1 A Brief Introduction to a Tourist Attraction Good morning, ladies and gentleman, welcome to Beijing! To begin with, I would like to introduce myself. I am a tourist guide from China Travel Service and it's my great honor to stay here with all of you for a whole day. Just as the old saying goes, "It is always a pleasure to greet a friend from afar", I wish all of you enjoy yourselves during this trip. The following is today's schedule. The first spot we are going to visit is the Great Wall, the grandest fortification in ancient China. The next sight is the Ming Tombs, which is one of the best reserved tombs for 13 emperors in the Ming Dynasty more than one thousand years ago. In the afternoon, we will go for the Summer Palace, the royal park for Chinese ancient emperors. Currently we are on the way to the Great Wall. Dating back to the seven century B.C., the Great Wall is constructed by respective states for fortifying against invasion of neighboring states. By the reasons of long history and its length, it becomes one of the eight wonders in the world and represents the highest wisdom and crafts. From the top of the Wall, we can enjoy a magnificent view of continuous mountains, green trees and blooming wild flowers. It is no doubt that one says, "He who has never been to the Great Wall is not a true man." Above is my introduction to the Great Wall. If any of you have questions, please feel free to ask me at any time. (260 words) 在本文中，作者运用了多种手段衔接语篇，达到内容的统一和段落的连贯: 1. 过渡词语:The following，the first spot，the next sight, in the afternoon (第二段) 2. 关键词的重复:the (Great) Wall 在第三段**现四次，紧紧围绕介绍长城的主 题。 3. 利用过渡句:Above is my introduction to the Great Wall. (第四段)这一句承上启 下，自然转入结尾。 4. 指示照应:it (the Great Wall) (第三段)的使用使句子更为简洁，符合英语的写 作习惯。 范文2 A Brief Introduction to a Tourist Attraction Welcome, everyone, I am glad that you can come to Pingyao County, where there is the oldest Confucius temple. It was opened to the public Monday after a one-year renovation project. (31?240 = 13%) I hope you could appreciate the spot indeed. First, I will show you the main building of the temple, and it's the most interesting spot here. Second, we can walk around to see the other area of the spot. Meanwhile I will introduce you the history of the temple. The main building of the temple was built in 1163, in the Yuan Dynasty, so it has a history of more than 840 years. Now I give you a brief introduction on the time-honored temple. Compared with other famous Confucius temples nationwide, it was built 248 years earlier than that in Beijing, and 317 years earlier than that in Qufu City, Confucius's hometown in Shandong Province. The temple in Qufu was added to the list of the World Cultural Heritages in 1995. The Pingyao Confucius Temple has China's largest statue collection of Confucius and famous ancient Confucian scholars. Covering a total area of 40,000 square meters, the temple has 112 buildings in 16 categories. That is the history of the temple. While visiting it after a while, I'll tell you more about it. (182?240 = 75%) If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to let me know and I'll sincerely serve all of you. I really wish you a happy day here. (27?240 = 12%) 在本文中，开头段、主体段和结尾段的分配比较合理，重点突出，详略得当， 75,的文字(第二、三段)用于说明行程、介绍景点，而且首尾呼应，Welcome, everyone, I am glad that you can come to Pingyao County, where there is the oldest Confucius temple.与结尾段 I really wish you a happy day here.遥相呼应，令人感到 亲切、自然。 大学英语四、六级考试写作部分要求学生在30分钟的时间内写出一篇120或150 字左右的短文。如果每句话平均10-12字左右，整篇作文平均大约12句话。如何组织这12句话，保持整体结构的合理、匀称，服务于主题，是考生首先应该考虑的问题。一般而言，文章的主体段的篇幅应该占到70,左右，开头段与结尾段应该各占30,左右，避免头重脚轻或头轻脚重，以保持比例平衡。 英语和汉语的文章结尾段都注重概括全文，照应开头。两者又略有区别，汉语的文章结尾往往比较严肃，尤其是议论文经常采用诉诸感情的手段，引用名言甚至口号结尾，以激起读者的共鸣，说教性较强;而英语文章的结尾比较轻松，往往通过引言、反问、故事、建议、分析、归纳和概括等手段深化主题，首尾呼应。因此，中国学生在写英语作文中，应自觉避免汉语思维的负面影响，避免使用命令句或祈使句的教训式或口号式内容，避免加入个人倾向，尽可能以客观的角度，通过论证、分析，得出令人信服的结论， 证明 住所证明下载场所使用证明下载诊断证明下载住所证明下载爱问住所证明下载爱问 观点的正确。